Monday, September 13, 2010

Annie's Thesis Statement

Early secondary characters create adversity which helps character development and to form Jane's sense of self worth and disconnect from conventional ideals.

5 comments:

  1. Good, but maybe replace "and to form" with "and the formation of".

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  2. i find this interesting! i'm really curiious about which character you will be using and whether they will all be positive or negative influences, or both, i also agree with tim

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  3. Oh yes, you're right, Tim. My grammar am not well. Do you think that "disconnect" is the wrong word? I don't want it to sound like she is ignorant to the conventional ideals, but chooses to be independent of them if they prove illogical.

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  4. Perhaps, in a new sentence:This newfound self worth causes her to reject conventional ideology or the status quo(pick your poison).
    You're a better writer than myself. I'm sure you've come up with something more creative already.

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  5. what kind of adversity? Is there a connection between adversity and success? Make this connection.

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